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S A R A T O G A

vintage vinyl creak behind
tush
in this lush hunters paradise
the lights gleam
rusted in the nicotine years
jolly with patina and age
smelling of wood parquette
bathrooms and beer
advertisement smiles
and velvetteen slate
tables for pool sharks
hip buffers on sweated
rock throbbing band
thrashing music
ques

Packed the ice trickles
on a Double Black Russian
glistens like the hungry
eyes dluted with
intoxicant sheen
and substance
while the voices rumble
thicker then the air
conditioners
and the stumble of
the bass
distortion of the
lead with foot pedal
chorus
a happy curl at the
corner of every
jackal and wolverine
done up in their
Friday Nite best

my stainless skull
ring clanks out too
the beat on the
glass as I lean
over the bar
eyeing up the
finest of the
feast
famished
elbow deep
leaning in to
chat up another
patron in from
the wilds
us six foot wild
men taking notes
on the pack
women

the different dances
now...more bump
and grind
club scene corruption
a happy hedonism
bump and grind
in the swirling strobe
of lights and lust
all gritty glittering
passion on moist
summer flesh

ten past eleven
and feeling the
glow
growling in the
depths of
subversion
as the band
covers
'Come as U are'

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Comments

Another atmospheric, tension packed piece of time.
I wouldn't suggest any changes, I think you have caught the evening exactly. Slight note of desperation too. Been to the same bar............ just in a different location. Jx

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the tension like my latest love
of lounging at the library reading
magazines with the pretty birds
..complete opposite of the bar
my finds find me
no challenge
its a pick and chose
the common stay away
in droves...the rare
arrive..
as they do
as they must

I just love the
interest aroused
that tension like
a drug state

more lasting

thank U!

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