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S L U I C E

aspirations
burn like a flame
You want serious cred
but your hearts full
of blame

Im a cat on the edge
V-for Verve in my name
you come back with
your claws
cause you style a
game

morning glory
head hunter
fishing stories
wanna bore me

(but I wait all day
for your voice
un resined baby
Im your bow on
a fresh mint string
so draw
me
in
and make this
hurt sing!!!!!)

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that certain someone's voice.

I work all day with anticipation
It doesn't matter what you say
Zoning out, no content
I've been waiting all the day

I think this is the beginning of a poem! Thanks Esker. ~ Gee

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Debbie Harry did a guest voice clip in the Gran Theft Game
the early one for a cab company Game based out of Florida
in eighties and then in the movie "Bringing out the Dead"
the one driver is in love with a dispatch character..I read
that book the movie is based on. I used to hang out with an ambulance driver
from Toronto in the heydays of the seventies...Used to drag
me out for coffee and chatter...debriefing....

Voices are sweet.....Muses...so many...
I like your poem beginning...

Thanks Geezer

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the idea that sparked it. Haven't finished it yet, but soon. Kinda tired after working 12 hr. shift.
That ambulance driver had some tales, I bet! ~ Gee

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