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s e h n s u c h t

Submitted by Esker on Wed, 2012-03-21 23:51

d r e h e n

riven a glass dressed in rains
the slow dance
the damp hell vice
upon a fire soul blazing

steam and wet desire
twin of night
twin of day

twas want for both
I long for play
the perfume of
the de ja vue

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Proprietress of...

Thu, 2012-03-29 16:51

Steven...

my first poem
on the new and improved...
it caught my eye, of course, your title being in a language I am so familiar with.
sehnsucht... the slow dance...
the poem rolls downwards lazily as it is read. a smooth write.
the perfume of the de ja vue, I love that line. it is the end of the poem but seems like a story which is only just beginning. a glance over ones shoulder while walking forward. I would love to see this as the first of a series of three poems.
so glad to be back...
your Proprietress