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Rhythm of a Forgotten Drum

Submitted by Mallory on Sun, 2018-06-17 11:51

Gradual process is my colourful nomenclature.
My self-exhibited great subject an essential drum beat that
I want to grab.

Vitality is coming out my life
At last that shall make people to shout: wow!
For a sudden reality of my very long dreams
Many would be in doubt to agree for an outlaw for decades
To create such mastery piece and to be co-author;
Some people will not believe my little
Scratch creativity.
Knowing that I work behind the close door for years
More especially (in solitary) that I always draw my strength.

Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Mallory

Tue, 2018-06-19 16:22

Mallory's picture

I need to beat my self harder to observe the usual mistakes that always persist. Thanks for your intelligent observation. Hoping to come to level of maturity. Though, i'm in a learning curve.

Ibe Frederick

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