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The Ultimate Prayer

Submitted by Mallory on Fri, 2018-06-01 11:01

I penned it down
Let it be read every where
I adore thee
Please let me be taken-
To a place of safety.
Let me be among the first fruit;
Let me not be left out.
I don’t want to be a residue.
I want to escape the fire that is coming.
My only goal…
Help me save my soul.

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I'm not party to this, the muse should explain better. It came and i drop the thought down.
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tyro

Fri, 2018-06-01 12:21

It sounds you are envisioning heaven , with the soul as connection for getting you there.
I like it for all its metaphorical qualities.

What the muse sends through you, takes on part of you, when translated to your voice.
nice poem

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Mallory

Fri, 2018-06-01 13:51

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You nailed it! It seems you perceived me when the thought was descending through.

Thanks for the read and full understanding of the poem.

Ibe Frederick

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