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Rainbow Bridge

There s Place called the Rainbow Bridge where all loving pets go to
when they die and leave us. You might think that when they passed
away and you Buried them that's end of their life
But it isn't . They live on in the Spirit realm and they all go the
Rainbow Bridge there is a angel waiting on them to take the
across the bridge and when they get across they get run and play,
And its never too hot, or cold they never get sick they can all have grass
and water they want. I know I have lots loved Bunnies over there.
And I know that they always with me in my heart.
So the next time you have a loved pet die and pass on
even though you going to sad and miss them very much.
Just remember that will over the Rainbow Bridge waiting for
you and they will have lots friends to play with.

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I didn't like this one as much as your other. It "felt" too much like prose. I would certainly call it verso libre (free verse).
You'll find I'm one of the pickiest poets here, I'll live up to my rep by telling you that there are several typographical errors in the poem. I won't point them out. I'm sure you can find them with ease.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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