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R A P S H A H

spike time
wavelength sync slick
like a cigarette burned
flic
greasy theatre atmosphere
tropicmesopotamia
like the old shirts
from mediteranean
heel worn boot
slick
thick air
like downtown
meatships
the ivory clouds
above needles
towers
scraping
dreams
where angels scrawl
their visions in chalk
the valkries at dephi
see bisions but dont
talk
and the sign at the
corner hums
Walk n' Don't Walk

dreams say hush hush
the ordeal
devils deal grind souls
for the meal
and in the waxed wood
maze of pews
rises the tall walls
where the candles hue
flickers

like shadows coming
down in parking lot
lights
the lightwaves
like pins
on a diamond wing
deflection
the steamy cars
dream past
and stealth buses
with blue night
vision ads

plush half tones
through the forest
of brilliant
meaning
textures beyond
seeing
a whirlpool
drawing round
like a seers
cup
the new year
tip it
up
say
waa supp?

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Comments

many scenes that I have seen before. Night-time in the city. It reminds me of Montreal or New Orleans. Love them both! Maybe because I have French blood running through my veins. Both of them settled by the French, so I guess that they have the same flavor. Just two typos that I see making a difference. [I'm sure you mean
[v]isions not bisions and you left out the [l]l in Delphi. All good for a new year. Hope you have a Happy New Year! Yours, ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I hammer these out super fast....
and my spelling sucks
no punctuation
..it slows me down
my thoughts vanish'
like waking in morning
and trying too catch the dream
still there like smoke

so hard living in both worlds

glad U like this..I love cajun
by the way
given choice between new orleans
and vegas
I think I would choose new orleans

thank U

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