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r e t i c u l a r .. s w i v e l .. s v e l t e .. g u i d e

Submitted by Esker on Sun, 2012-08-26 03:12

shimmy with the sham
the glue gun bold hold
like spot welding

slap a thigh and tell
me the Hull is fresh
for frolic

Cut plasma ideology
with the tip of your intellect
like a cats tongue
sipping cream
on a polished floor
from a turquoise bowl

marvel of engineering
she moves smooth
gliding through the
sets
in her
repaired retro dress

cough up some love
to slip inside
the warm smooth
cups

its her world
and she'll
eat it up

lifts her beautiful
chin

"suck it up Buttercup!"

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Valyrianne

Sun, 2012-09-02 08:28

Retro

This feels like a performance piece. Like I can see the pale swirls of smoke rising from the soft and hurried brushes of the snare as William Shatner sips his scotch between chopped lines and long drags from his Joe Camel. Really took me there...wonderful imagery!!!

Val

Esker

Sun, 2012-09-02 10:51

shatner from stratford to stratosphere..

Jane brought from the retirement home in Paris to dance again
and live bands to the new techno
the smokey amblience of the drink
the crisp crackle from a fresh pack
and the expectations of euphoria

retro the dragons
chased harried and applauded
in their long sinew rush

Thank You

author comment

Ian.T

Sun, 2012-09-02 10:58

Steve

A smoke screen
to a longing that brings the dancer nigh
She plays at ballet and modern in one twirl.
To shake your head and spoil a dream.
When this beauty is a mirage seen.
A purring motor full of drive has come alive
It is not a cat I'm sure of that.
But a dream machine that has to be loved.
Yours reading your grand riddles once again, Ian.T

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