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Pulling the Pin

That leaking faucet was maddening,
it had nothing to do with his car
breaking down, catching his wife
running around or the totalitarian way
his boss ran the office;

no, it was that sleep depriving drip
he needed to grenade.

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That sounds like a great poetic beginning for a story, Richard. How u b?

Much love.to you and yours.

I b's fair to middlin, and you?

Yes this one begs for more, I was going for impact consolidated.

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Like this!

Namaste,
Lenny

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"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

Thanks man, sorry for the spastic time thing, I'm
undeniably human.

Richard

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had the thought that it sounded like the beginning of a story.
Then I realised that this was the whole story! Anyone should be able to see that the poem describes a person that is misdirecting their anger toward the faucet, so that they wouldn't feel guilty about blowing up their wife , the house and the car. The boss is next! Loved this one Richard! ~ Gee

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Can't help but want to blow up something at times,
life gets crazy. Glad you liked the little poem.

Richard

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Loved this piece, just turn the water off at night lol, will send you a Grenade by post but I must retain the pin, as it's so useful for removing stones from horses hooves, I do hope the gaffer tape holds in the post,
Yours Sparrow

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I'm still waiting on that grenade (lol) ... thanks!

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is short but packs a big punch. Two huge problems are mentioned almost in passing, as if the silly faucet were the only trouble. How often our real problems are channelled into expression via minor cares! But I only see that now of course, after reading your poem.
Best wishes,
Robert.

I appreciate your look into this poem, it is one I actually
liked because of a few things, short but strong, flows fairly
well and the title fits perfectly without giving anything away
until after the read.

thanks,

Richard

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