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Soothing Projections

Imagining to understand
causes my head to throb,
so I write to alleviate,

it relaxes the air
and I become the rain
pounding the roof.

the beep beep of the clock
and no moments are hidden,

the cold distance between planets
and my marrow freezes over,

the tire pinches the pebble
and I'm the low hum of the road ...

but I'm home
nursing my head.

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I know what ya mean. Sometimes I try to fix things in imaging but then it can all run away and boarder on paranoia.
I like the idea of the low hum in the end.
Best to sit and get it all on a document and out of the mind.
I like how this read in it's entirety unopened.

that's how I see it.

Mark L.

Thank you for the kind words,
I liked the low hum too, relaxing.

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The old testament! goodness, thank

Usually I write because I have to
write it down to remember it lol,
even when its drivel.

thank you for your visit

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Nice sounds and images. tells it as it is. I don't know why else we do this ridiculous thing.

(not sure about the title- you know, the projection sounds more like a cinema thing, and kinda leads me away from the poem not into it...)

great poem!

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Projector didn't cross my mind, but now
it does. I was going for "projecting" myself
in soothing (debatable) situations ... I'm
old school too, now I see the antique film
projector barely working in the middle of
the room lol ... not married to the title, I like
to add something or at least be theme based,
got any suggestions?

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What we project outward does come back to us.
Some normally fast but for some, projections come back warped and that can be a bad thing.
I believe your title is spot on, myself.

that's how I see it.

Mark L.

and yet the ideas come through so clearly. Nice. ~ Gee.

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