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Psapfo 11

The archers of war
are yet the archers of love

Love has taxed the hearts
of gods and kings

Achilles has slain no less
than Eros

the path of all lovers
leads to the plain of suffering

drink wine to excess
drink me mad o god of the dances

for the wine of living
is of the same vineyard
as the wine of the dead

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