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Precarious Times
Precarious Time
Looking back though, I found comfort
in ephemeral things. Birds flying in formation,
off to southern climes. Wood from a fire,
always destined to be embers.
None of these things lingered
beyond their established purpose,
but they were always predictable,
offering modest shelter
from your meandering heart.
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Lavender
Sun, 2023-11-05 20:27
Precarious Times
Hello, Michael,
Predictable situations are wonderful during unstable times, especially when it comes to matters of the heart. Really feel "modest" shelter. The word yanks at the gut and lets the reader understand the intensity.
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-11-07 18:31
So true L! Your comments are
So true L! Your comments are spot on, and glad you liked this one - thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony
author commentClentin
Tue, 2023-11-07 09:16
Wood from a fire,
Wood from a fire,
always destined to be embers.
Captures the ephemeral things. Good poem
Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-11-07 18:31
Thank you Clentin! Appreciate
Thank you Clentin! Appreciate you stopping by for this one.
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Michael Anthony
author commentCandlewitch
Tue, 2023-11-07 09:33
Ouch!
this hits home...Hard!!! it stays with you, lingering in the heart and mind... after which, is silence huge and engulfing...
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Michael Anthony
Tue, 2023-11-07 18:32
Ouch is right Cat! Thank you
Ouch is right Cat! Thank you for sharing your thoughtful comments on this one - much appreciated.
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Michael Anthony
author commentWilliam Lynn
Sun, 2023-11-12 11:41
Hello Michael.
Hello Michael.
Beautifully written, enough said!
All my best. - Will
Michael Anthony
Wed, 2023-11-15 09:58
Thank you William!
Thank you William!
Michael Anthony
author commentkowque
Wed, 2023-11-15 02:31
Well
Birds flying in formation made me
Think of James and the giant peach
I truly enjoyed the last line
Koki
Michael Anthony
Wed, 2023-11-15 09:59
Appreciate your comments Koki
Appreciate your comments Koki - thanks!
Michael Anthony
author commentkowque
Thu, 2023-11-16 02:20
Having read this again
That last line
Is so painful
I'm sorry
Koki
Michael Anthony
Thu, 2023-11-16 10:10
It's okay Koki. The
It's okay Koki. The experience that motivated this recent piece was from some time ago. The toll has been paid
Best.
Michael Anthony
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