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Poem: For Upon My Head, Nothing Gold Can Stay

Standing at the threshold
of Death’s ultimate door,
my last gasp escapes me…
As I’ve never experienced before.

Into the Heavenly realm
I ascend in wonderment,
now housed in an incorruptible body
and thankful that from sin I did repent.

Standing in God’s throne room
freed of all Earthly flesh,
my spiritual essence is energized
and feeling fully refreshed.

Now gathered unto my Savior,
unencumbered reality is more than it seems;
for to be in His Presence
is my accomplished dream.

Having been given my kingly reward,
in these times of everlasting days,
willfully I set my crown at His feet.
For upon my head, nothing gold can stay.



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By Joseph J. Breunig 3rd, © 2008, All rights reserved.


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Free verse
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Can't fault a write of ones beliefs and I have looked at your site Squidoo,
All seems to be above board and you beliefs noted,I hope we can look forward to a few poems outside of your basic beliefs they would be something to see.
I am a person that has leanings toward the spiritualist ways also many other ways as long as they bring no harm to others and are sincere this is fair, take care of you and yours and may your God walk with you.
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks for your feedback and kind words; I strive to live with a fair amount of transparency (to be above board) as you've generously noted; I do have a few poems outside the expression of my faith. I'll be sure to post some of them here.

Logic, when applied to people, fails miserably! -Me

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