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Pain

My inner darkness
The glass of the soul
Falling catches no sunlight
Dropping onto black marble

Shattering without sound
Without a sparkle,
Or thrown light.
Never let this be me.

I scream inwardly
No one hears my agony
I touched the darkness
With my whole being

It is a product of a hurt
I have been given to hold
Held so that I cannot breathe
Reflected within myself.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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I am fine, I just write sometimes, Yours Ian.T
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I have no critique, just appreciation.
Every time I read this I find myself at some new aspect of pain, and it's disquieting, how succinctly you capture it.

Respectfully, Jim

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Great to see you visiting, and your comments are much appreciated.
I jot things on notebook and leave them for a while I sorted this
yesterday, Have so much work to do but never seem to get around to it.
At the moment am looking out some of the ones I don't usually write, Thanks again, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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is that I know you don't have such grief but you
captured it as if real.
It touches !!

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Thank you and good that you notice that it isn't me that hurts.
There are many that do hurt so, and it is to say I know.
Thank you for your write I hope that in understanding that it isn't you either.
Take care out there and enjoy life,
Yours as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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