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OBI

wane
drank the wine
somehow the priest shot him a bottle
Kept an eye on the church
knew all the addicts
who leaned against the warm
limestone
the night patrol groups
he was 3rd Bat back in the day
different then the old Flattop pilots
who talked about training in Michigan
the hot rod Merikan rotary fighters
Everyone I knew young and old
had flashbacks
He talked me into picking up
a good solid poncho from the
surplus
spending "watch" eyeing up
the entrance of the alley
with some kind of battery
powered scope
Usually I just watched the skies
I could hear and sense more
then what my eyes told me

Haven't thought about those
city folks far away in a long
long time
but I dreamt em up last
nite..or like they did in life
they found me
or maybe

maybe we just found
each other
like Liberators

...

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Were it not for the fact that you are a poet, I would worry for your sanity!
It seems that you are able to cough up these fur balls upon request - dear chap.

"Kept an eye on the church
knew all the addicts
who leaned against the warm
limestone",,,,,,,,,, I like this snippet, its quite an observation that actually rings true for me.

You strike me as a weird fecker; I going to enjoy reding you.

Obi.

being a non published entitiy gives me greater reign of voice
non voice then sexton or any of those that burst through
the door then..During just post McCarthyism
It is refreshing to find the mumbling chaotic voice
in the times of the great compromise
Remember when rock bands like Stones and CCR
and the Hollies....(Long tall woman in a black dress)
or cool was so radical...

so glad U enjoy the works
I shall enjoy Red-ing U!

thank u!

Mr Wolf!

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Dude looked like Obi wan Kenobi..
had intution...and he was crazy
fiction...Luke trusted Obi..he had
too...he wanted to know about
Princess Leia...
What if the "Force" was "Intuition"
perhaps its a mere tip of the iceberg
of intelligence..without and within

Obi wan....Obi...space bar shit
type...Wane....twenty something
men women at the top of their
heap.....set aside...go reside
in your mansion or trailer or cabin
but that does not dimish the
intel within or their free foraging
interests in that they were loyal
too.....A new moon is still a moon
though it throughs no light
its density mass and importance
pulls the tide
and as a Jedi Knight in that movie
I saw as a child....he was living
in the Wane...but his real purpose
was drawn out..
The whole triliogy is the Knights of
the round Table...
I read much as a youth
and worked for real heavy
Princesses whose families
were in the wan years later
far as it is now with my hacker
chums and intel groups
the love me when I throw
names for intel files
to peruse...
Web is international Village
in my eyes
we need everyone
nec pas

alec guiness an aging actor
got the part.....If like I U watched
"Kind Hearts and Coronets"
and "Bridge on the river ..whatever
that name was"
and U were construction...meaning
I relate to the building and running
of systems..based on bright people
like Luke and others for its purpose
sole purpose..
Or....touched upon the elite who
backed such structural existances
..
then its not weird...
my boy..I do not mere cough up
fur balls on request
but I smile at your simile

My chums who work film industry
I enjoy
but wish not for that
enjoying my languor of the
free man today

just remember
Use the Force

Thank U!
Mr Wolf!

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I love this you are so good at bringing images to life. thank you for sharing.

moving props and sets in the dark
Thank U Phoenix!
Mr Wolf!

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of knowing what u r expressing
I only love to read the poetry
whenever it's short
rest comments wisen me
they know more after all esker

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