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nouveau

Submitted by Esker on Mon, 2013-04-29 11:31

glitter in the glass
shine like tiger in its grass

you were mirage glare
freedom
a song I had lost

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Mon, 2013-04-29 12:36

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Can't get the full image of the first stanza but thought the second one
really deserves the title...Certainly nouveau

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loved

Tue, 2013-04-30 10:13

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mind
once again
though
short and sweet

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Geezer

Tue, 2013-04-30 19:35

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I get the image you were trying to project in the first stanza. The elusive quality of both the glitter in the glass and the tiger in the grass? ~ Gee

This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Esker

Wed, 2013-05-01 10:36

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I have issues concerning alcohol
denial and addiction for this poet
is not seeing what is there
the potential of greatness
for calamity

Or the power of that

i never felt away or free
so I threw what I did not percieve
as freedom aside

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