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Memory

I whisper you name
Am I so mad to feel
Those touches of long ago

I have taken your ways
moulded them to mine
will you feel it in time

I become angry at this space
Empty hands, a tender heart
tender thoughts miles apart

Each day I build a bridge
there in my mind where I lay
with you along side my form

Wishing to have been born
On another shore it is sad
My thoughts walk those shores

I have in my stupidity
Had chances given to me
By others as I journeyed so

I could have been with you
This is why, I cry deep inside.
Yet am quietly holding love

Did we both know of this
The time we spent only bliss
One time and that one last kiss

A faint shadow of beauty
Is there to fill my days
I hold you now, and always

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A memory should I hold or let go Don't answer that I will hold

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hold on,
as memories only ;last till;; one's end
too epicurial to read fullyy
for me

loved

Hold on till the fibrils of its being slip free

lovely poem its seems we both had things on our minds

love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

The memory is as clear today as it was then, so I shall keep it where it belongs in my top drawer, there with all the happy bits that make my soul smile, Yours Ian.T

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What more can I say?

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you for your welcome visit, and comment..
Just a flashback to old days, and I have plenty of those lol,
Yours Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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