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MEDUSA THE SCENT OF MALE

Submitted by Geremia on Thu, 2012-03-15 08:59

MEDUSA : THE SCENT OF MALE

From the darkness
that hid
her abomination
she slid
sniffed the air
and dropped her veil
seduced by the smell
of male

there they stood
mesmerized by the beauty
of her ugliness
in a trance
of desire and revulsion
as Medusa began
her dance
of seduction

serpent strides
back and forth
left to right
in orgasmic thrusts
of promises
that were to come
to each one
who looked upon
her serpent smile

there they stood
stone they had become
paralyzed by desire
and revulsion

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Barbara Writes

Fri, 2012-03-16 01:01

i like this

It reads really well
Beauty in her ugliness kind of threw me as her ugliness kills on the spot lol

I like the part in the title "the scent of a male "
Absolutely can seduce a woman lol.

Enioyed reading

Ps the one thing I'm not sure of is who became stone Medusa and the male or the ones looking at her serpent smile:)

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Geremia

Fri, 2012-03-16 02:50

Legend is anyone that looked

Legend is anyone that looked upon her turned to stone.

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loved

Fri, 2012-03-16 05:28

That's why they say the penis in male is

That's why they say the penis in male is
the Serpent
and the
Forbidden fruit contained as seeds
in the two plums
to be squeezed
and the scent of sperms
all women by now know
that's why women feel attracted to men,
who in the earlier part of the day went solo.
Your serpentine words speak loud enough
for any woman
how so ever ugly,
to yearn...

serpent strides
back and forth
left to right
in orgasmic thrusts
of promises
those were to come
to each one
who looked upon
her serpent smile

Simply exotic words...

loved

Geremia

Fri, 2012-03-16 07:14