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MAYBELLINE STARTING LINE

Submitted by Esker on Mon, 2016-09-19 12:25

Tools in an ammo
box..dirt from fingers
planting phlox
Hunched Hunkered
mind in the bunker

gears and bearings
the pancho like fairing
No time for Tiaras
and tea
But she drops in to
Show..."Look at me"

"You'll never figure
me out!!"

Grin madly and wild
chase her down the
hall with a squeal
and scream.Slam
the door...saved by
the phone ring!

business chat over
throws her clothes
on the floor
"Be a chum darlin'
Got my shift at
the store!"

(hot off the press)

cute little uniform
Got my heart on
a chain....Like all
her other boys
and men
Who is there too
blame

but the wonders
of attraction
such a tough game....

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Vivovon

Mon, 2016-09-19 20:08

A lovely train of words, telling something of busy, busy but jumpy, jumpy. It is crispy. I learn much from your poems and writing. Thank you.

xxxxx

Esker

Tue, 2016-09-20 10:42

Esker's picture

was online watching Jack White teach The Edge and Jimmy Page how
too play one of his songs...Icky Thump I think it was....got an original
sound..Mr White is an excellent musician.. no ..sorry...Seven Nation
Army...that was it....it was funny...at the end he goes..."That will be
five dollars"

Neo is great..just talents crafting ..like jamming together..
we are all blessed with abilities
no carbon copies..
if we wrote poems like illustrators making but a page too
the animation...something much would be lost

each poem is a flicker of recognition and wonder
Compare a cut glass
to that of a real Diamond
I know diamonds
I prefer them
they are alive with fire
not mere reflection..

thank U!

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