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Magic

Submitted by sueb on Thu, 2013-02-07 03:37

Waves cascade against the shore
relaxation to my very core
always leaves me wanting more
the sea to me, is never a bore

Whispers from sea shells
Wafting by, sea smells
casting a magic spell
my heart and soul swell

Sitting here is just bliss
enjoying sea air's sweet kiss
not a moment I want to miss
Feels like paradise, this

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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sueb

Thu, 2013-02-07 04:40

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thanks a million ephraim for reading and commenting Sueb x

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Seren

Thu, 2013-02-07 07:34

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I agree with Eph with a little pruning this will run true ..
nice to read you again

Hugs Jc x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

sueb

Thu, 2013-02-07 07:43

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thanks Jc
hugs back x

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