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M-79..

Submitted by Esker on Fri, 2012-08-31 00:01

There is crickets over at the tree line
They are keeping me awake
the dreams away

lock and load
and wait for the silence..

Jiminy cricket can book it out of there!!!

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Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Sun, 2012-09-02 11:03

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There are, There is, crickets over there, well you must take care, which way round is the M-79 or you'll sure get Shrapnel in your behind..
Loved the write, but a bit of excessive force being used.
Grenades and cricket don't mix.
A bat and ball and three silly sticks,
Not that sort of cricket ????Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

Esker

Sun, 2012-09-02 20:44

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excellent Ian!!!
Thank You!

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