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LOST WITHIN THE MATRIX!

Submitted by Leslie on Sun, 2023-02-26 21:51

Lost in the Matrix

When the beauty of the ethereal
Envelopes the esoteric mind
The natural boundaries
Of language expand
To fill the empty lines

No one knows and none can tell
The darkness, that within the matrix dwells

Only those who
Having experienced in part,
With heavy burdens laden
Upon their hearts

Can see the unseen
There in the dark
Their destiny carved out
With their very own hands

Creating a niche
A refuge from the storm
Which the world cannot detect
Nor comprehend!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I wrote this one for a close friend who struggles and though it probably wouldn't provide consolation now, it seemed to then. I have since refined it, cut it up a bit and this is what's left! If it illuminates anyone's mind, although it's appears dark. I've done my job! I eagerly await the response of anyone interested.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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