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Night meets light!

The darkness breaks, the dawn arrives
the blackened night confounded.
The spirit voice, which speaks within
consoles and is resounded!
Gently now, it calls to you
comforts and surrounds you.
The guilt you feel is swept away.
Release the past behind you!
Your memory the battleground
no longer seeks to find a cure
accepting natures calling!

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The poem "Night meets light!" employs a narrative structure that moves from darkness to light, symbolizing a journey from despair to hope. The use of imagery and personification, such as "the darkness breaks" and "the spirit voice...consoles and is resounded," enhances the emotional resonance of the poem.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of meter to improve the rhythm and flow. For instance, the first two lines have different syllable counts, which disrupts the rhythm. The poem could also benefit from more concrete imagery to ground the abstract concepts of guilt, memory, and acceptance.

The last line, "accepting natures calling," is a bit ambiguous. If it is meant to suggest a return to a natural state of being or a surrender to the inevitable, it might be helpful to clarify this with more specific language.

Overall, the poem effectively communicates a journey from despair to hope, but could be improved with more consistent meter, concrete imagery, and clarity in the final line.

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enjoyed the theme, I was disappointed that you didn't continue rhyming all the way through.
That said, I think that you could continue to rhyme, and still not lose the main idea.
The title is enigmatic, and I am tempted to say that it means more to you, than it explains the poem.
It kind of feels unfinished. ~ Geez.
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thanks for acknowledging that I wrote something in my last writing no one made one comment I guess it was too controversial

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the first two lines are amazing, with stronge evocative power. I love poems that suggest a spiritual awakening

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

To me that is all that there is. On the one hand or the other! Thank you for taking time to read.

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Hello, Leslie,
A like the title very much... a sense of "it's always the darkest before the dawn." The pace was quick, which added a lot to the meaning and intensity of the poem. I enjoyed this!
Thank you!
L

I don't know what to say, but thank you!

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Successively until our languages become one!

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