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listless calamity

Submitted by Esker on Fri, 2016-11-25 03:43

FM radio back talks
the stillness
outside the frozen
tracks wait for
shadows
rush hour
sewing buttons
on dress shirts
repairing pants
shinning blades
counting money
talking beneath
myself
organizing
remnants
shoring up my
life
persona

patient stars
diffused shine
an epic shower
of an age

marvels in archive
collections
treasures
forever I forget
and in dreams
remember
poignant reflection

everything in passing
stirs like a wind
sails of the journey
fanning reverie
and action

..

Editing stage: 
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Sparrow

Sat, 2016-11-26 04:04

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Visions of the daily things we do nothing changes in the physical chores.
I wonder if the next write can be the changes in you thinking on the day to day things.
Which is the most important of the two the physical sometimes drudgery or the great freedom we have in our minds to do anything, food for thought young Wolf, as the winter closes in the physical becomes trying where the mind can go without tethers.
Thinking of you out there, great write as usual,
Yours Ian..

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Esker

Sat, 2016-11-26 06:23

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thanks Ian!
was bummed out for a few days
so I keep busy
I drift to the negative with lack
of sleep
went through my old files
so few left in all the moves

focusing on the focus
which I lost for awhile

so I snapped it back
got it together
which I do..
as well as drifting way
way off target

Up early chilling with Bunni
tidying up place
teaching the dog how to
shake a paw
which she is picking up
slowly with treat rewards

something we all can
learn..new things...

Hope you and the missus
are hanging in there
like we are here....

snowing here...about
two inches of snow
but warm for this time
of year..a respite..

all else going well!

Mr Wolf!

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