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Leave Me Be (June contest)

I would have kissed your feet,
Though at my age I can't bend so low
I can kiss your fingers
If you hold them just so.

I use to be able to jump into bed
Now I’ve got a pain in my head
The headboard has just butted me.
Still we can spend some time fancy free

What’s this I hear you want to be
Now know this: you are the same as I,
Broken bits that time passed by
Why do you think I don't chase the birds?

With my walking frame, how absurd
Now let us get down to facts
No strength to part my long hair
Just to see things I can't remember there

Let’s have our ceiling painted my dear,
So we both see something up there
Why do I go to bed nude? you are rude!
If only I could bend to put jimjams on

Then we would try and sing another song
If either of us could remember the words
Tomorrow is another day, save energy, then play
We both know that it will be the same as today..

Yenti

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I think maybe you should add a colon to the line in the third stanza like
"Now know this: you are the same as I"
idk

Thanks for your heads up on colons I thought only of irritable bowel syndrome lol..
Thanks for your visit, my son in his wisdom sent me a blow up walker frame but it just let me down, they don't understand. lol
Yours as always Ian x

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lol. It's great to make fun of ourselves and growing older, is in my opinion a blessing. Loved your imagery and the endearing way you have written this like an act from a play. A wonderful enjoyable read.

So we can both see something up there,. Instead of both can? Just a thought

Another wonderful contest entry, comedy is my favourite type of poetry. And this is really fun!

Thank you...Teddy

Wrong entry It's not funny this growing old lol.
Thanks for your welcome visit, Yours Ian x

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but one time my mother said to me: " When something hurts, [physically or most times, mentally] sometimes you laugh" ; I asked why and she said: "You laugh so you don't cry". I'm on the fence about that right now. Good write to keep us thinking. ~ Gee.
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Thanks for your visit my friend, we have been here many years now and some of us don't age any more and they are o missed..
Take care young man, and keep your family safe,
Yours Ian

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it is humorous, and it reminded me that only the strong in character can make fun of themselves. I also appreciated the subtlety of your inferences. Enjoyed.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Many thanks for your dropping by it gets harder for me to visit others, now age has caught me,
Now damn lock down and have others bringing food and things, lol
A pandemic hits everything especially when it is a killer.
Take care and great to have you here with us on Neo,
Yours Ian..

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Ditto, lol

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Hello, Sparrow,
Much to laugh at from the first line to the last! I can certainly relate. All so funny and adorable, which also makes it so wonderful.
Thank you!
L

Such a lovely name to use it has structure,
and a perfume that greets all realms of our being.
Take care and great to have you on board with us.
Yours Ian ..

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you know i've just come back to read this once again, and its so funny and so full of charm. in every stanza there is something so wonderful, may i also say that your first stanza just sets up the whole poem, its truly a delight to be in competition with you and your somewhat dodgy bones! lol i will not dare say break a leg!

Thank you...Teddy

Your name makes me smile as it brings into my old mind all the teddies I have here, near Eighty of them lol.
My Son sent me a pump up walking frame last year lol
The damn thing let me down so I beat the wind out of it lol.
Have a lovely life and stay laughing at us, we don't mind.
Yours as always, Ian xx

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oh sorry Ian
in front of my poetry this time
you have nooooooooo chance

still @ 80
I Romance dance and prance
as we all do in England and lovelier
France

You laughing at me, always remember,
I am the seventh child of a seventh Son.
I wonder if that rings a bell of warning not to upset me lol
Take care young one,
Yours, Ian ..

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of the FIRST ONE
and scared of me is even HEAVEN
not haven
lol
and so don't scare or score over
me

DID YOU MEAN
Let me be

Just letting you know how bad assed I can be when things don't go well lol..
Not to worry young one, I even swat flies with cotton wool, so they don't get hurt.
Take care,
Yours as always Ian ..

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A lady went to a Halloween house and asked
IZ YE DED YAT

AND HOPE HE DIDN'T DIE OF a serious disease
U convey well Ian C U
Howz CORONA in UK

Thanks for your coded message English is my Mother Tongue.
All these damn abbreviations are lost to the new world, or that's what we use to call the rest, and they actually adopted English as the international talk.
Now we are not only beset with a virus that kills old folk like me and ethnic minority, we have lost at least 60000 people so far 1 in 1000 are dead so far, considering that a pandemic usually kills about 3.4% we have done pretty well.
Now we have stupid riots on the streets, and desecration of the old makers of our country, just because a stupid cop in the USA murders a black guy..
We will cope and come out the other side as we have done for the last 2000 years..
You make sure you are protected we have lost so many of our great poets over the last few years, I am 78 now and it bothers me a little but the children look out for me and one day I will join them to help them in their tasks..
Have you any info on Joe I have his address here but don't want to write just in case it is lost some place..
Take care old poet, our days are numbered as all peoples are, Yours as always Ian ..

30 days has September, April, June, and dull November, all the rest have 31, except February alone who has 28 days clear and 29 each leap year, what number are you lol..

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31
read my
BRUSH WITH DEATH
@80 experience not mine
but of those who
now go>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
keep running
virus now the say is bacteria
really funny
have honey

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