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Leap of Faith

Why make a leap of such great faith alone
When you have a friend there to stand beside?
Another with you should jump in quick stride,
My branches serving as a stepping stone.
This is a jump of great importance, no?
Implying in it a change of magnitude
That may greatly affect your attitude
Toward more than you’d ever wish to know.

But in this leap of faith a friend does come
To aid you in your troubled lonely state;
Finny, with tie about his waist, always late
Did with you fall and in water blossom.
He is your rock and steadfast foundation,
Always ready and willing to strengthen.

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This is something I wrote for my dad's English class. It's roughly a petrarchan sonnet, and the theme is from "A Separate Peace" by John Knowles. I'd love some feedback!
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Comments

"Faith is a short-circuit that burns out the brain"
The poem is nicely written though.

cheers,
Jess
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