This is quite good, although I think it deserves a better title. Don't worry too much about that though - I'm not good at titles either!

Your language use isn't bad, although there are some things that I would change:

I would not use the word "so", I would cut out as many "ands", "it"s and "the"s as possible -but you won't be able to get them all - and I would avoid the use of the word "love" in a love poem, at all costs. It's just too easy to use, lol.

I like your rhyme, and the cadence, the pacing, is OK, but it will improve with editing out those small words. I would also try to make the syllable count equal on each rhyming line.

The theme...you'll find a few folks here don't care for love poems, as they are way, way overdone, and often just cliched sentimental tripe, what many of us call "hallmark poetry".
Your poem comes close to this, I think, but don't be discouraged by that. In fact, keep writing love poems, if that is what you like to write. I like writing them myself, and damn what people say!. Read the love poems of others as well, particularly those on this site that other folks say are different, and good. Practise makes perfect: you'll soon get the hang of it.

This was a good read, keep writing.

read classic love poems off this site. The real immortals- Shakespeare, Yeats, Wordsworth, Shelley. That's where the cliches got invented and that's where to learn to avoid them.