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JULY 27
A breeze blows by here on the porch
yet sweat still gathers on my brow
'cause its so hot even weeds scorch,
It could be hotter.... I don't know how.
A cloud is building in the west,
I hope it decides to come this way
a bit of rain would be well blessed
on this hot dry summer day.
A crow arches on the power pole
then fluffs his feathers trying to cool.
He can't offset being black as coal.
So I squawk at him like an old fool.
Across the field a whirlwind rages
sending leaves and such into the air
which twirl like torn up poems' pages.
Then it dissipates without a care.
That building cloud went another way
taking other clouds along with it.
Man it sure is hot today.
Did I already mention it?
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Thu, 2022-07-28 17:17
Yes...
It surely is hot today! I felt like I could be watching the same scene from my front porch; looking out over the valley.
Only thing I see to change, is the addition of the word [air] the last word of the second line in the fourth stanza.
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
scribbler
Thu, 2022-07-28 21:16
Hi Gee
I thought it never got really hot up your way lol. Thanks for spotting my omission (hasty posting). stay cool
Geezer
Fri, 2022-07-29 00:45
Oh Hell yeah...
it gets hot here. We have had high eighties and nineties for the last two weeks! 102 they claim with the heat-index; whatever the hell that is. It is supposed to be in the high-mid eighties for the next week. Not much rain; they keep promising thunderstorms, but we've only gotten a couple of little rumbles and hardly any lightning. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
scribbler
Fri, 2022-07-29 01:54
Heat index is a measure of felt heat which is determined by the
actual heat plus humidity. We have had just a single 30 minute shower here in the last 3 weeks. Seems we get thunder and radar shows rain heading this way but it just dissipates or misses us by a mile or so. I reckon we aren't paying the preacher enough lol
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-28 18:04
hello Scribbler,
I'm sorry you are so hot and miserable I am in my cool basement.I hope your hot spell breaks with some rain.
*hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Thu, 2022-07-28 21:17
Well
We trade off mild winters for hot summers lol. thanks for dropping by
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-07-28 19:47
Yeah you said it
I’m framing a 96 foot long single family home. The entire two acre lot is cleared. The dust rise like the wastelands of a Mad Max film. There is no such thing as shade. This is definitely hitting the mark with me.
Good one,
Tim
scribbler
Thu, 2022-07-28 21:21
Yep. I was a builder most of my life and built a lot of homes
and barns many of which had no shade anywhere. The last few years I'd buy and set up a pic nic canopy nearby so at least during breaks I'd have some shade lol. Be careful in the heat