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Every time I go somewhere
and drive around a little bit
there it sits each time, I swear
each made for different a fit.

A single shoe, just one lone shoe
in the middle of the road;
White, black, red or even blue.
sitting there like a lost toad.

But not in the same highway
just random roads to random places.
I wonder what each one might say
if their tongues could talk through their tied laces.

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The poem "ONE SHOE" presents an intriguing concept, using the recurring image of a lone shoe on the road to evoke a sense of mystery and curiosity. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

1. Consistency in Rhyme Scheme: The poem seems to follow an ABAB rhyme scheme in the first two stanzas but deviates in the last one. Maintaining a consistent rhyme scheme throughout can enhance the rhythmic flow and overall cohesion of the poem.

2. Use of Imagery: While the poem does a good job of presenting the recurring image of the lone shoe, it could benefit from more vivid and varied imagery. For instance, describing the surroundings where the shoe is found or the condition of the shoe could add depth to the poem and make it more engaging.

3. Clarity in Theme: The poem seems to hint at themes of randomness, solitude, and perhaps the stories untold by inanimate objects. However, these themes could be developed more clearly and consistently throughout the poem. The last line about the shoes' tongues talking through their tied laces is a creative metaphor, but it might be more impactful if the poem built up to this idea more gradually.

4. Rhythm and Meter: The rhythm of the poem is somewhat inconsistent, with lines varying in length and syllable count. This can disrupt the flow of the poem and make it less pleasing to read or hear. Consider revising the poem with a consistent meter to improve its rhythm.

5. Word Choice: The poem uses simple, straightforward language, which can be effective in certain contexts. However, more varied and sophisticated vocabulary could enrich the poem and make it more engaging to the reader.

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you might change the line: "sitting there in some road," to: "like some varied colored toad." That would make it seem like they are hopping about by themselves, which could explain why there are only one. ~ Geez.

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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Yes that line or at least that word need to be altered. I scratch my head, and other areas and see what I ca come up with.

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I always used to wonder, as I took walks along the beach why there were so many shoes, usually child size, half buried in the sand. I wondered whether they were just lost or there was some more terrible explanation. This one made me think. Alex

Yeah one can easily see a child leaving a shoe on the beach or car top on a road. But the lone shoes come full sized more often than not. At least these shoes don't have a foot in them........

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..ridden a schoolbus in rural areas when I was younger, occasionally, someone's shoe would get tossed out the window as a joke. Around here, there was a shoe tree also. I forget how many shoes were thrown on it, but it was dead and the township was worried with the extra weight on it, it might fall into the road. It was cut down, likely to the dismay of people who saw it as a novelty.

Your poem is novel also and spurred that memory when "Piggy" had one of his shoes thrown out by the bus bully "Ziffel" (his name was Arnold)
Be great if you could come up with something for S2L4...I see Geezer made a suggestion, so I'd like to throw one at you, too.
"Like some enigma to decode"...not much but it's a tough rhyme in that particular context.



. like my lost dreams...the flood

Sorry for late reply. I appreciate your visit and suggestion. I decided to use toad instead of decode......not sure why lol

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Sorry for late reply. I appreciate your visit and suggestion. I decided to use toad instead of decode......not sure why lol

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