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insectoid

a train of a billion ravenous centipedes
circles the earth every morning
looking for their next meal.
each minute,
a helpless prey is drawn into this mass,
ripped into pieces for consumption
before the metamorphosis.
then a cocoon for shelter,
a carapace for skin,
a mandible for lips.
emerges another insect to wander
slithering beneath office tables at night,
and hard-to-clean spaces,
at extra cold storage rooms when no one else is looking,
on scrap piles illuminated by city lights
that are varying shades of green.

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Being quicksilver better. This one has me a Kafka this morning. Bugs and coffee like Naked Lunch.

Tim

that is interesting! thank you, Tim.

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perfect! The pacing is much like the fast centipedes I see slither along the cracks in the basement next to the washing machine when I turn on the light. I see your background of Sci-fi consumption in evidence here. I have noted that many
Sci-fi authors have taken animal life from the natural world and enlarged upon their unique aspects to bring us monsters.
Nice stuff!
~ Geezer.
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thank you very much Geezer, as always!

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