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Imaginations
I dream of a rainbow wood
In a world beyond our moor
Where the moon looms as the sun
And fireflies twirl into stars
I dream of a rainbow wood
Of singing fairies and listening unicorns
Where dancing dwarfs and crickets
Weave music into the clouds
I dream of a rainbow wood
Its seasons telling stories of spring blossoms
Of autumnal colours and winds
Of summer’s delights and warmth
Of winter’s chill and plays of snowballs
I dream of a rainbow wood
With showers of fallen embers
and shimmering waterfalls
Meander with the golden streams
Into an eternity beyond gleam
Style / type:
Free verse
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scribbler
Thu, 2012-01-26 17:54
hello
Welcome to neopoet. Looking forward to reading more of your writing. If you have any questions about navigating the site or any other questions just ask me or any other member...........stan
WonderGolly
Fri, 2012-01-27 04:29
hi scribbler,,,,
thanks for your warmth welcome. Glad to be a part of the community again.
I have questions though and they go like this,,,, If I was a member of Neopoet before it went offline and now back;
1. Can I sign in with my old user account or do I have to create a whole new identity?
2. Can I repost my old works? If no, why?
thanks for you time.
best wishes
WonderGolly
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
author commentscribbler
Fri, 2012-01-27 08:40
hello
reply sent by private message
China Blue
Fri, 2012-01-27 09:42
Hi
This is a most enjoyable piece to read .May I make a small suggestion
"of dancing dwarfs and crickets"
for some reason mind mind read this line as
where dancing etc how would you feel about changing the of to where?
Chrys
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
WonderGolly
Fri, 2012-01-27 09:57
hello Chrys
thanks again for your time.
I get your suggestion and it's welcomed.
would definitely make the correction.
you're always welcome
respects
WonderGolly
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
author commentIan.T
Fri, 2012-01-27 10:14
Wonder
Knew that the next poem would shine, just along the lines of fairies and things where I wander sometimes.
The ink is running with the new mood, forgot to welcome you back to Neopoet, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
WonderGolly
Fri, 2012-01-27 10:53
Thanks,,,,
Ian T. it feels great to be back again. was a little sad when the site went offline. thought I checked again yesterday and there it was active with a whole new look. Great community. lovely people around.
respects.
WonderGolly
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2012-01-27 11:20
Hello WG,
Good title that lends to the rest of the piece. I love fantasy poems, so this my cup of tea! I think the language usage makes the lines flow from one to the next. Great imagery, too! I like these lines best:
I dream of a rainbow wood
With showers of fallen embers
and shimmering waterfalls
Meander with the golden streams
Into an eternity beyond gleam
I read that you used to be a neo poet previously. What user name did you go by? Perhaps I know you from before?
always, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
WonderGolly
Fri, 2012-01-27 12:30
Hi Candlewitch,,,,
nice of you to pass by and read this piece. I appreciate it. thanks.
the imagery of the poem intrigues me myself. Fantasy poems and novels are my greatest source of inspiration. it's a huge world of dazzling ideas beyond imagining. one can simply live eternity in there and not bother about the real world. pity that it's not real.
I read the except of "The Book of Styx". I definitely would give it a read.
*GOLLY KWAME WONDER was my user name before neopoet went offline. wasn't that much of a regular face around but I visited quite often.
respects.
WonderGolly :)
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2012-01-27 12:45
Hello GW,
I was ill for a long time so that may be why I don't remember you. So I say "Hello and Welcome!" Your poems are a breath of fresh air! Thank you for looking into "the Book Of Styx!" written by my male alter ego.
always, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
WonderGolly
Sat, 2012-01-28 03:52
thanks, Candlewitch
for the warm reception. Glad that you're okay now and kicking in good health. nice to have you around. thanks again.
respects.
WonderGolly :)
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
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