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I feel Myself

When I walk this lane,
I feel the roughness of this path.
When I run on the track,
I feel the difficulty of my speed.
When I look at you,
I feel I can do much better.
When I sit all alone,
I feel I have something to do.
When I sleep in the corner,
I feel I should get up.
When I stand by my decisions,
I feel I am what I am.

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and welcome back.
I didn't like the repition of the "when I..."
I can see the message you wanted but thought you can do a bit of culling to make this sharper and right to the point. Just an opinion.
As I checked your other posts, I see you don't reply to other's comment. I think this is not a
healthy thing at Neo. If you're here to enrich the site with your thoughts, communication is one of the most important tools.
Thanks for sharing anyway.


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Hi Rula,
Sorry for replying to my previous post, I will keep in mind to post regularly from now on.

Thanks for the comment on poem, I will try improve hereon.


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