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I am Clay

Mold me into any form or shape
I’ll blend into your creation
All vibrant patterns and color’s fit
and come together in perfect unison
I can be anything you want me to be
pretty, smart, or brave
I will stand tall and proud
but if you leave me out, and forget about me
I might start to harden
to develop a crabby shell
I could become hard to work with
as you struggle to flatten me out
But a drop of water, like a drop of kindness
can make me soft again
watch my colors become more vibrant
and my texture smooth as silk
then take me into your loving hands
and mold me the way you wish.

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Hi Viviana,

nice poem, nice idea. I especially like the cadence of the poem, it almost controlled my breathing. Was this meant to be a cadence poem, or is it just that I see it that way?


The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

is so beautiful, I want to see it in a short-story. :) Perhaps someday someone shall see this and turn it into a tale. Well done on the thought-basis of this poem.
The rhyming and meter, however, are very rough and do need a lot of work. But your idea is so solid, I don't doubt a rework could do great good.

"To reveal art and conceal the artist is art's true aim." Oscar Wilde

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