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A Husband

Submitted by sueb on Sun, 2013-01-06 15:18

He takes out the trash, or makes dinner

thinks he's cleaned the whole house

he's not capable of being quiet as a mouse

full of self-praise

himself, he amaze

selective hearing and speech

sometimes hard to reach

never practices what he preach

loveable and incorrigible

he's not interchangable

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

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Esker

Sun, 2013-01-06 23:39

Esker's picture

we grow like vine trees wound about the soul
of the other
filling in the shadow
where our warmth and light
can be

and yet we canter hauling burdens
catching an eye or a look
aware of what misery has took

I wear your poem
on my heart
Sueb

Like this one much!

sueb

Mon, 2013-01-07 04:52

sueb's picture

Hi Esker thanks so much glad u liked this one as only married 5 months and late to it at 44 (mid-life crisis lol) happy to see it works for you and your significant other I love your line we grow like vine trees wound about the soul have a gr8 day all the best sueb x

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