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HIDING BEHIND MAMMA'S SKIRT --edit

Submitted by Geremia on Sat, 2015-08-15 10:42

HIDING BEHIND MAMMA'S SKIRT

There is no honor, no bravery
no courage nor will
in death's agony;
only fear and the loss of the self.
The soul sickens in its loneliness
and the mind hides in shadows
of fantasy and delusion.
A deep sense of alienation
begins the final disconnect.
we wait and wonder until
we can wonder no more.
Our voices are lost in echo
to a silent and indifferent universe
and then with our last breath
in desperation and hope
we call for our mother..

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lovedly

Sat, 2015-08-15 14:33

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many always call mama

when they have it at night or when they are white in fright and now ur also right mama is awaiting her sonny upright but not ever in sight as many mamas will be seen floating once you are there god knows where is our mama up there so take care take her last snap she must be taking a long outstanding nap and may not say sonny now come mammas way sorry no skirt now to display we all have none here anyway you also come nude right and for ever in freedom stay mama loves you still but here you will have to find your own way!hi sonny stay there as long as you may!!!....

Geremia

Sat, 2015-08-15 16:33

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We look to return to the place where we were safe and nurtured.

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Sparrow

Sat, 2015-08-15 19:31

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A singular cry for the ones you love, there through the veils of pain and fear is that one person that brought calm to your soul, keep her close, but know that she will be close anyway.
Inside you have a pure light so never fear about going into the darkness of change.
Take care young Joe and know we are there with you as always, Yours Ian..

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Geremia

Sat, 2015-08-15 19:57

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I pray you are right, Ian.

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Sparrow

Mon, 2015-08-17 18:32

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The first word of this piece needs the gap taken out as it is T here at the moment..
Joe the pain we suffer here is for us to learn, as you believe in our spiritual progress, there is no way a spirit can feel pain, I wonder sometimes which of our religions talks of us returning home.
Yours as always, Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Geremia

Tue, 2015-08-18 11:03

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I am afraid, Ian, that I don't believe in anything anymore. Read my comment to Esker.

joe

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Esker

Mon, 2015-08-17 21:35

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and into the after..
some went on their own...many
others peaceful..
others fighting to the end....

the isolation...I know its terrible
and then the wondering...
waiting..surviving..

I had mothers but it was not
a true nurturing..
i picked up bits and peices along
the way..
nothing was or ever will be mine
cant say my mother was Mine..

but to want for that...that comfort
that love...thats a strong emotion
and cant argue that!
its essential to the essence that
I know now after months since
that lesson...

You at least have our little scrabble
crew here whom keep in touch!
and relate to you in a great per cent!
I used to dream of my mother...
but It haunted me and i bought
or donated money towards the cancer
society and it helped appease that..
strange...

I was not a technical religious man
but have been in some orthodox places
listen to the music...
or try to find in the rain and wind in
brief summer some kind of at least dark
mystery in that too soothe all that haunts
myself also...

I wish for you that there is much beyond
this....that indeed a re uniting of better...

thank you for your always heartfelt sharing
of experience Geremia!
your friend Steven!

Geremia

Tue, 2015-08-18 11:00

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Thank you, Steve. I am seeing doctor at 3:30 today. I AVOID HIM LIKE THE PLAGUE.I don't want to know anything else.

Too much to worry about. No release, In March 2 cousins died witih whom I grew up, My mother's sister lived across the street. One of the sisters also has Alzheimer''s. she would call me 2 x a month, The oldest lost her son [52] and Audrey died--all this March. I don't want to suffer .Stage 5 of Parkinson's usually ends with dementia AND Alzheimer's.,

Too much knowledge is a bad thing, I don't want to go like my mother--but, at least. she had me to take care of her. I have no one--2 older siblings. that don't give a shit., I can only hope tp go fast and with no pain or anguish..

joe

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Esker

Wed, 2015-08-19 02:35

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why I relate...I hope you dont have pain or anguish Joe!
Love your writing and love writing to you my friend!
good solid poetry!

thank U

Geremia

Wed, 2015-08-19 09:12

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Thank you, Steven, I enjoy reading your comments.

joe

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