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~Gloss~

Submitted by Esker on Fri, 2016-11-04 01:46

Rimbaud
was gay
Morrison a wretched drunk
Sexton suicidal

in their world
excess and reviled
from their minds
came Gloss
and Matte
delirious definitions
scewed out spewed
out the painful intricate
art the words

The Light is obscene
shivering edges on madness
days its better on a stone
Mattress
on a glow
of soft matte
exhilaration
No nerve end is
loose to the tubes
humming in avoided
rooms
paperwork in locked
drawers
and Sins examined
with tools of machinery
as quick and deliriously
slow and delicious
as a fresh machine
on an oiled carriage
(air mail blue vertigo)
coming up from the dive
for air
clearing the bombed out
empires of egos

clearing the pasted dreams
push pin rhetorical tabs
for a cleaner look
A bleary burn full of ash
and smoke
Talismans emerge
in focus
like cartilidge and bones
awoken
Adjust the wings
temporal lobe chronic
imagination
Undamaged cigarette
unsullied as the rest
with gin
a swallow of the fortifying
purity of narcotic
I want the arms of the chill
about me
watching this bitter sunrise
climb through the lair
to greet
an old brush to ring out
the vivid dreams
a torn coat
for a windy welcome
a challenge to walk my
shadow
collecting sighs
and smiles
re reading all
the loves letter
files

..

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

weirdelf

Tue, 2017-07-11 01:16

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nothing personal, you know I love it, I've been pretty slack in critique generally, which for once is a good sign, being well involved in teaching ESL and a group supporting young visual artists who have difficulty expressing themselves verbally. Even spending more time in the meat world.

This feels different. Hard to nail what it is, like you are saying something from a different place. I'll need to read more to see if it's a change in direction for you or a one-off. I like it, whatever it is.

It's a bit of a pity we don't have a 'like' button like Facebook. Though your work requires very little critique I'm sure you would like to know it is read and appreciated. Maybe I'll do that, if I have nothing more to say, just leave a 'like' for a comment.

You are an important poet, to everyone but especially to me, brother wolf.

cheers,
Jess
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