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G r o u n d d o w n

sparks we shone
drawing heads
and doubts

throughout the jealousies
and envious hooks
we stole the pages
of each's book

sharpening like a skill
this trade
we flattened and dulled
the tempered

Its winter now
and late
we throw the walls
kick stones
in spate

how we crowned
the victories
being first
drawing further
further tossed
till we
are lastly


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nil carborundum Illegitimi seems that this is what your piece is about lol,
It is a mock-Latin aphorism meaning:-
"Don't let the bastards grind you down".
Loved this write I should comment more but yesterday has run out and I must sleep now, 00-23 am
Night young Wolf take tomorrow when it arrives as a new day for hunting , hunting for love and understanding then write about its sometimes feelings of futility.
Yours Ian and the Children

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

friction produces sound
the moon pulls a tide like a shroud
a revealing
like a minstrel travelling show

some times we think we are sharpening ourselves
when we are dulling
to make something other
the before

thank you!

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but wondering about the final 'lost' - seeing as you've used the word only a couple of lines before ---
can i suggest 'adrift'?

i get more from this every time i read it - your usual great word play

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I didn't know how to to end this either and adrift is a situation
like losing your paddle at the dock before you begin your journey
something that happens to all...

humor then and Yes
its not describing what kind of Lost.
I like this
this is workshop kind of thing...making me think deeper
Thanks Judy!
Mr Esker!!

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