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FORSAKEN

Submitted by Geremia on Sun, 2012-02-19 20:33

FORSAKEN

Nothing is forever
for anyone.
the days pass us quickly by
as moments die
into old photographs.
Lovers love until
they love no more.
friendships fade into yesterdays
and the dreams we dream
are by God and Man forsaken.

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Ian.T

Mon, 2012-02-20 08:23

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A cry of sorrow but to me in vain as you will take all those thoughts with you, the loves, friends and all whom you wish to walk with on that beautiful journey, this is only a testing ground to see how far we can go..
Good write there young man, "young ?" you are as old as me so I will have to be respectful lol, Yours Ian.T

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Geremia

Mon, 2012-02-20 08:46

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Thanks, Ian. Slightly older :) But, man DO I LOOK GOOD. I thiink my stone will read: I TOLD YOU I WAS SICK.
I can't "kick it " yet-not until at least I get my first wrinkle. LOL

Joe

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weirdelf

Thu, 2012-02-23 04:33

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I love it and I love this

cheers,
Jess
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