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In The Field

Submitted by Lavender on Fri, 2024-01-19 10:33

outside,
fresh snow

yesterday's footprints
are forgiven in white

I hesitate to
leave the house -

to disrupt the
new and pure
seems
unpardonable

but once
alone
in the field

I am joy.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Michael Anthony

Fri, 2024-01-19 11:24

Beautiful Poem L! Love the

Beautiful Poem L! Love the "Yesterday's footprints are forgiven in white" line - good stuff!

Best

Michael Anthony

Lavender

Fri, 2024-01-19 16:56

Hello, Michael,

Fresh snow is so inviting, but I hate to make tracks on the bare canvas - until I get out in it. Then it is pure joy!
Thank you for reading!
L

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2024-01-19 14:21

Dear Lavender, (I love your name)

I can only say, with smile on my face, that I agree with Michael! Nice job.

*Higs, Cat

*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Lavender

Fri, 2024-01-19 17:00

Thank you, Cat!

This morning's snow was so lovely!
Thank you for reading, and your kind comments!
L

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Alex Tanner

Fri, 2024-01-19 18:16

How I used to feel when I was younger but not now. Lovely to look at but as I grow more ancient look at it is all I want to do. Not that we get much here, no real falls since 2010. But your words certainly bring back pleasant memories. Alex.

Lavender

Fri, 2024-01-19 23:04

Hello, Alex,

It is beautiful, but I understand the unpleasantness it brings when driving in it and getting out and about. I love walking in the snow, though, especially away from the distractions of houses and streets. A lovely, quiet connection.
Thank you for reading!
L

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