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Energy

Submitted by Lavender on Thu, 2024-04-04 01:16

I am mountain
I am sea
I am desert
I am tree

I am the taste of salt
I am the rushing rain
I am the smell of earth rising
I am red poppies of the plain

I am universal
I am the only
I am of all present
I am of the lonely

I am your vision
I am your beam
I am your light
Your realized dream

I am the dust in the stars
The infinite being
The endless space and time
The knowing, all-seeing

I am the "I Am"
Your heart, mind, and soul
The forces you exist within
The partial, the whole
The definite, the certain
Yet, still... the loss of control
I am great abundance
As I am the black hole

I am the "I Am"

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2024-04-04 05:00

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this is a wonderful piece, taking inventory of all you are made of. I really like it! my favorite lines are:

I am of all present
I am the only
I am the one
I am of the lonely

almost like a recipe'
*hugs, Cat

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Lavender

Thu, 2024-04-04 17:13

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Everything is energy, and everything is connected. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
Thank you, as always, for reading!
Lx

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2024-04-05 06:53

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"Everything is energy, and everything is connected" Yes! and energy can be broken down but it cannot be destroyed!" Thank you for this!

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Lavender

Fri, 2024-04-05 15:24

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Thank you for reading again, and sharing your thoughts!
I appreciate you!
Lx

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Geezer

Thu, 2024-04-04 10:23

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that you can even up the rhythm, and make this smoother.

In nature, you exist
Within the partial, the whole

And still... loss of control

I am the abundance
I am the black hole.

I am in agreement with Candlewitch, this sounds very like a recipe.
A recipe for living; with the measurements splashed and dashed.

~ Geez.
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Lavender

Thu, 2024-04-04 17:17

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I'll think over your suggestions. I don't think this one is quite finished yet - exploring the amazing way energy connects everything around us.
Thanks for your thoughts and help with this!
L

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Clentin

Fri, 2024-04-05 19:11

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I enjoyed your preception and description of the energy that surrounds us.
Great poem, I liked it very much.

Lavender

Sat, 2024-04-06 11:09

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I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for reading and commenting!
L

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