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Evening Walk
There were diamonds on the water
and she wanted them
But these were not here
to rest in her hands
They travel with the sun
and the insistent tide
Riches she could not hold
would have to be visited again
near the shore, on the morrow
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You never know when and where creativity will visit. Walking with my wife today, she commented on the sun's reflection on the water - like diamonds, and how she wished she could take them home - a beautiful day to be sure!
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Geezer
Sun, 2021-08-08 14:27
Yes...
This is where we learn about creativity and wealth. Riches are not always to be held, they sometimes take the form of thoughts spoken and listened to. I like this, much! ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2021-08-08 15:19
Thank you sir! Always
Thank you sir! Always appreciate your visits. I wish I could have posted the pic I took that inspired this - be well!
Cheers
Michael Anthony
Obadiah Grey
Tue, 2021-08-10 12:18
A found poem worthy of print!
A found poem worthy of print!
and the reading of.
Obi.
Michael Anthony
Wed, 2021-08-11 15:08
Thank you Obi! Glad you
Thank you Obi! Glad you enjoyed this one.
Cheers
Mike
Michael Anthony
Triskelion
Thu, 2021-08-12 15:56
I wish
I could say more about your piece, having read this a number of times now, but Geezer's comment pretty much sums up my thoughts.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2021-08-14 16:29
Thanks Thomas! Thoughts and
Thanks Thomas! Thoughts and input ALWAYS appreciated.
Cheers
Michael Anthony
scribbler
Thu, 2021-08-12 16:35
Hello
Reminds me of many evenings on a lake's shore. Well done
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2021-08-14 16:30
Definitely was trying to
Definitely was trying to capture that - thanks Scrib!
Cheers
Michael Anthony