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EDIFICE..ENTICE
rain rich
burial
garment fresh
the control was the test
ring finger hand
riding shoulder shotgun
capillary dreams
await
shunting the show
and the world
exhales in its draw
like your blurry funny
way
how you love
through
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Comments
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-06-13 01:02
Great intensity and tone!
Hi Esker,
After laying my two cents upon your RAYNE and seeing how you work, I looked at this piece a different way. Though I feel this piece is has much more of the spaces filled in, I still feel more comfortable critiquing as if I were approaching a visual work, perhaps a Gregorio de Chiricho or Man Ray piece. I see an uncomfortably long ride in a Black Lincoln town car with a person devastated by the loss of a spouse and trying to appear strong but at the same time vaguely enjoying the lack of constraint (could do nearly anything and it would be understandable) and at first and last, the loss of something irreplacable. Could be wrong, could be right but that's what you made me feel and see.
Thanks Esker for a real pearl
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Esker
Wed, 2012-06-13 01:45
grieve In
and through out
Ive never had my works looked at in this manner
although we did do art works for public
much like the street vendors but much more raw
I will have to look up Gregorio and Man Ray
it is about being in two places
about duality
how to handle a loss on one hand
and deal with the boring horrendous freedom
on the other
break rules
break on through
break favorite things
and break away from
the irrevocable ireplaceble
You are correct in this being more visual
I loved storyboard artwork
and still do although I shy away from
Graphic novels
only for the cost from getting into this
addiction
I can barely afford a decent Parker Pen
for doing graphic works and just use
Laurentian Pencils for coloration at
the moment
Feel and See a new concept in connection
Thank You Blue Demon77
loved
Wed, 2012-06-13 01:18
difficult for mundane minds like mine
to comprehend
but perhaps a relief
though still in grief,
lets move on tomorrow perhaps
some one else will ,
in my place be...
how ever your thoughts are
exquisite
and
wonderfully nice
loved
Esker
Wed, 2012-06-13 01:48
rich starvation
Thanks Loved
Im quiet at the moment
not quiet sure what to say
on some works here
been going through
some things and that affects
my perspective and how to
approach people and poetry
too
Like I point my finger to make
a point and open my mouth
and think better
raise a finger on the keyboard
and just slowly feel it dissolve
Thank You for the time to comment
here!
loved
Wed, 2012-06-13 10:14
I am quite sure
I am quite sure
your quiet attitude
speaks much more
for that only friend ...
I do you adore
silence
is the word my mom used to say
mum
that's the best way..
loved
Esker
Wed, 2012-06-13 13:52
M o t h e r
everyone loves
everyone hates
mother
my now dreams mother
our nightmare visit
mum is the word
BlueDemon77
Wed, 2012-06-13 02:16
Just read AT THE MOUNTAINS OF MADNESS graphic novel
I also have a PT Barnum signed by Howard Chaykin and David Tischman and a 30 Days of Night signed by Steve Niles and Ben Templesmith. I have a few other less notable ones laying around, of course Watchmen, I have The Furies by Vertigo, The Preacher goes to Texas. maybe a couple more.
Strange how I saw your work visually in still, either you're really good or I'm very intuitive, most likely the former....hehe
I can dig the financial state, my wife is out of work and I am down to part time IT contracts, I'm using the time for reading and writing though. Though at the moment I'm overdrawn briefly because of a huge vet bill.
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Esker
Wed, 2012-06-13 08:10
Strain of constraints
L and her daughter A and I just keep going
govt housing (nice apartment ins alphabet numerics)
said dog and cats
part time work that carries us between months
We live for days
and yet we live
health issues covered by Canadian Govt
crime very minimal comp to other places
yet food costs are high due to location
shipping for fuel now and recession
school for teen is very good
I remember reading much also
during the free times
when I had no family
or between them
when I purchased books it was EPIC (marvel)
or HEAVY METAL A lot of the storylines were
poetic and the simple dialogues were easy
to glean
We have a good comic book store here
You signed works must be a true treasure
(and family of course)
Neopoet has been my salvation through the
years
it is like a storyboard with other artists
posting their images for the minds creative
jaunt
I feel you have a lot of intuition
Thank You