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EDIFICE..ENTICE

rain rich
burial
garment fresh

the control was the test
ring finger hand
riding shoulder shotgun

capillary dreams
await
shunting the show

and the world
exhales in its draw
like your blurry funny
way

how you love
through

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Hi Esker,
After laying my two cents upon your RAYNE and seeing how you work, I looked at this piece a different way. Though I feel this piece is has much more of the spaces filled in, I still feel more comfortable critiquing as if I were approaching a visual work, perhaps a Gregorio de Chiricho or Man Ray piece. I see an uncomfortably long ride in a Black Lincoln town car with a person devastated by the loss of a spouse and trying to appear strong but at the same time vaguely enjoying the lack of constraint (could do nearly anything and it would be understandable) and at first and last, the loss of something irreplacable. Could be wrong, could be right but that's what you made me feel and see.
Thanks Esker for a real pearl

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

and through out

Ive never had my works looked at in this manner
although we did do art works for public
much like the street vendors but much more raw

I will have to look up Gregorio and Man Ray

it is about being in two places
about duality

how to handle a loss on one hand
and deal with the boring horrendous freedom
on the other

break rules
break on through
break favorite things

and break away from
the irrevocable ireplaceble

You are correct in this being more visual
I loved storyboard artwork
and still do although I shy away from
Graphic novels

only for the cost from getting into this
addiction

I can barely afford a decent Parker Pen
for doing graphic works and just use
Laurentian Pencils for coloration at
the moment

Feel and See a new concept in connection

Thank You Blue Demon77

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to comprehend
but perhaps a relief
though still in grief,
lets move on tomorrow perhaps
some one else will ,
in my place be...

how ever your thoughts are
exquisite
and
wonderfully nice

loved

Thanks Loved
Im quiet at the moment
not quiet sure what to say
on some works here

been going through
some things and that affects
my perspective and how to
approach people and poetry
too

Like I point my finger to make
a point and open my mouth
and think better

raise a finger on the keyboard
and just slowly feel it dissolve

Thank You for the time to comment
here!

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I am quite sure

your quiet attitude
speaks much more
for that only friend ...
I do you adore
silence
is the word my mom used to say
mum
that's the best way..

loved

everyone loves
everyone hates
mother

my now dreams mother
our nightmare visit

mum is the word

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I also have a PT Barnum signed by Howard Chaykin and David Tischman and a 30 Days of Night signed by Steve Niles and Ben Templesmith. I have a few other less notable ones laying around, of course Watchmen, I have The Furies by Vertigo, The Preacher goes to Texas. maybe a couple more.

Strange how I saw your work visually in still, either you're really good or I'm very intuitive, most likely the former....hehe

I can dig the financial state, my wife is out of work and I am down to part time IT contracts, I'm using the time for reading and writing though. Though at the moment I'm overdrawn briefly because of a huge vet bill.

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

L and her daughter A and I just keep going
govt housing (nice apartment ins alphabet numerics)
said dog and cats

part time work that carries us between months
We live for days
and yet we live

health issues covered by Canadian Govt
crime very minimal comp to other places
yet food costs are high due to location
shipping for fuel now and recession

school for teen is very good

I remember reading much also
during the free times
when I had no family
or between them

when I purchased books it was EPIC (marvel)
or HEAVY METAL A lot of the storylines were
poetic and the simple dialogues were easy
to glean

We have a good comic book store here

You signed works must be a true treasure
(and family of course)

Neopoet has been my salvation through the
years
it is like a storyboard with other artists
posting their images for the minds creative
jaunt

I feel you have a lot of intuition

Thank You

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