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Duke Energy Nightmare

Submitted by infinite_dwarf on Mon, 2020-07-27 13:47

Lightening flashes hot
Sparks fly from pole blindingly
Ear-splitting cacophony

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Structured: Eastern
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Motivation and focus: We had a good storm a few nights ago. There were a couple very close bolts... I just embellished some with a fried transformer.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Mon, 2020-07-27 13:59

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to make an assumption that your local power co. is named: Duke Energy? Good one, you managed to pick words that will be argued about. [If they are two or three syllables]. But that's okay, I think it makes it more interesting. ~ Geez.
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Teddy15

Mon, 2020-07-27 14:36

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Yes music to my ears!

a wonderful 577 you've never heard me sing... love your last line it really kicks.

Thank you...Teddy

Lavender

Tue, 2020-07-28 16:38

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I agree with Teddy and Geezer - really like this. Love your language to describe sight and sound!
Thank you!

infinite_dwarf

Tue, 2020-07-28 12:37

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Now we're dealing with a real Duke Energy nightmare! I smell a sequel....

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raj

Tue, 2020-07-28 12:55

Until reading the comments above, i couldn't figure out what's relevance of Duke...now it makes sense....i like short poems...yet wonder what form you mean when you say it's structured eastern?

have a good day..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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