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Duke Energy Nightmare

Lightening flashes hot
Sparks fly from pole blindingly
Ear-splitting cacophony

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Motivation and focus: We had a good storm a few nights ago. There were a couple very close bolts... I just embellished some with a fried transformer.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

to make an assumption that your local power co. is named: Duke Energy? Good one, you managed to pick words that will be argued about. [If they are two or three syllables]. But that's okay, I think it makes it more interesting. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I agree with Teddy and Geezer - really like this. Love your language to describe sight and sound!
Thank you!

Now we're dealing with a real Duke Energy nightmare! I smell a sequel....

author comment

Until reading the comments above, i couldn't figure out what's relevance of Duke...now it makes sense....i like short poems...yet wonder what form you mean when you say it's structured eastern?

have a good day..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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