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Conversations with The Universe

Greetings all... I feel this is unfinished and maybe a little long-winded... I also seem to always overlook at least one grammatical error, regardless of my diligence...
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Conversations with The Universe

She tried

time and time again

to navigate to her-self.

… walking the dreamscape reaches

of soul-visions

quickening of the senses

as she attempted

to decipher

the eclectic elements of her inner truth…

… awakening via conversations with the universe;

Where to begin; other Travellers share the journey

brush past seen and unseen

some creating ripples of energy

positive and negative…

chain-reactions

release explosions of power -

vibrations are interactive

connecting the mutational threads of the matrix

to our fluctuating neural pathways…

At the crossroads of evolution and

devolution

obtuseness-ever-present

march back along the path travelled

declining into

perpetual apathy…

or

rejoice in the midst of a divine redefining

life is the nature of flow, and of us. Nothing is impossible.

Except for obstacles invented, visualized

- created in moments of self-doubt.

Where to begin…

… quickening of the senses

as she attempted

to decipher

the eclectic elements of her inner truth…

… awakening via conversations with the universe;

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Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
I have shared this piece with some friends on Facebook and look forward to their response.
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you will get along very well here at Neo. I particularly liked the repetition of the first and last stanzas. Like it was some sort of cycle. Very nice. Nothing posted here is ever beyond adding to, subtracting from or just plain fiddling with. We try to give meaningful critique and comments, so that you have the opportunity to do just that! That is the beauty of this site! I hope that you will take advantage of our workshops and enter the monthly contest. Welcome! ~ Geezer.
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