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Challenge Sweet Talk from My Lover. Short and Sweet.

Submitted by Alex Tanner on Thu, 2023-05-18 14:13

Each night before I fall asleep
I feel her breath caress my cheek,
I feel her hair like softest dew
Her scented flesh that wakes anew
Feelings strong I can't ignore
Until, that is, she starts to snore.

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May 2023 Challenge Sleep Talk From My Lover
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neopoet

Thu, 2023-05-18 14:13

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Geezer

Thu, 2023-05-18 19:35

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I would love you see this one continued.
~ Geez.
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Alex Tanner

Fri, 2023-05-19 04:59

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Damn you Geez. You have given me food for thought, I'll see what I can do. Alex

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-05-19 08:45

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that it could be really funny to have her wake up with the dog next to her snoring away or how you spent the night on the couch, maybe... Well, you get the idea. ~ Geez.
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Ruby Lord

Fri, 2023-05-19 05:39

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Great punchline, made me giggle. Ruby :)

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Alex Tanner

Thu, 2023-05-25 08:24

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Thank you Ruby. Geezer suggested expanding it but I can't think of anything suitable. I have tried writing more, but nothing seems to work. Reckon I'll leave it as it is. Alex.

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Obadiah Grey

Fri, 2023-05-19 08:23

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Hee Hee, Got me!!

Obi.

Alex Tanner

Thu, 2023-05-25 08:25

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Glad I did Obi. Geezer suggested expanding it but I can't think of anything suitable. I have tried writing more, but nothing seems to work. Reckon I'll leave it as it is. Alex.

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RoseBlack

Sat, 2023-05-27 10:33

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gave me a much needed laugh. I agree with Geez, what happened after?

~RoseBlack~

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