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BULL'S EYE
BULL’S EYE
you hit your mark
you knew it well.
you knew my heart.
the poison lingers still.
your words like jackals
on the hunt
found their kill.
they ripped and tore
until nothing more
of me
was for the taking,
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Geezer
Mon, 2012-11-05 02:40
I found...
this one very succinct and liked the fact that you didn't linger with it, like the poison in your heart. You said what you needed to say and left it at that. Leading me to believe that you are becoming healed from the wound, but bear the scar proudly. A cartharsis. ~ Gee
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Geremia
Mon, 2012-11-05 04:03
Less tells more.
Less tells more.
thamks, my friend,
author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-11-05 03:22
Joe
You survived an attack from Killer..
Good write and as Gee said it didn't mess about as an arrow in darts straight to the bulls eye..
I hope you are well young traveller, Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geremia
Mon, 2012-11-05 04:05
sometimes the understated is
sometimes the understated is stronger message.
thanks, Ian
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