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Beyond the Forrest
Beyond the forrest
Sunshine rise
Finding a pot of gold
Style / type:
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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neopoet
Tue, 2023-08-22 16:11
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Line 1: "Beyond the forrest"
- The word "forrest" seems to be misspelled. The correct spelling is "forest." Please double-check your spelling.
Line 2: "Sunshine rise"
- This line lacks clarity and could benefit from more descriptive language. Consider expanding on the imagery to help the reader visualize the sunrise more vividly.
Line 3: "Finding a pot of gold"
- This line introduces an interesting concept, but it feels disconnected from the previous lines. Consider providing more context or developing the theme further to create a stronger connection between the ideas.
Overall, the poem has potential, but it would benefit from further development and refinement. Consider revisiting the imagery and themes to create a more cohesive and engaging piece.
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Lavender
Wed, 2023-08-23 12:16
Beyond The Forest
Hello, Crazy Mary!
May I suggest:
Beyond the forest
sunshine rose
finding a pot of gold
Kinda personifies the sunshine...
I love short and endearing poetry!
L