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Bacterial haiku

Was my sore throat you?
head to toe ? Or gym bacteria
Either way twas worth it

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Experimenting with haiku. Did I get it right?
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traditional haiku is 5-7-5
this is

But I don't pay much attention to the traditional count, which doesn't translate exactly from the way Japanese is spoken anyway. Still, the point is to say as much as possible in as few words as possible, so this could use some editing.

Traditional haiku makes a philosophical point generally using one of the seasons of the year. When it is about human quirkyness it is called Senryu

Again, though, I love your style.

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Altered and thanks

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I'll work on it xxx

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in these very concise forms, isn't there?

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