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Random Haiku 3

Submitted by T. Harmonee on Wed, 2017-08-16 09:55

How big is my love
for you? Moons wide,
Heavens high, Oceans deep.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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T. Harmonee

Wed, 2017-08-23 08:02

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As you know, most Haiku poems written in modern times, don't follow the original structure of the 17 syllable: 5-7-5 line count. Also they are now broad with their choice of subject matter.When writing this, I was trying to focus on describing the size of the love for a person, Oceans deep (describing depth of love) Moons wide (describing width) Heavens high (describing height).
I was trying to move away from the traditional structure, at least with this poem.

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- Maya Angelou

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